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First Journey, by Don Tassone

12/2/2021

12 Comments

 
Impact. Union. Division. Falling. Attachment. Implantation. Cushion. Protection. Nutrition. Growth. Formation.

Face. Eyes. Jaw. Mouth. Throat. Blood. Circulation. Heart. Ears. Fingers. Toes. Arms. Legs. Brain. Spinal cord. Digestive tract. Organs. Tissues. Bones.

Exploring. Opening and closing fists and mouth.

Fingernails. Toenails. Teeth. Facial features. Eyebrows. Hair. Fingerprints.

Flipping. Turning. Sucking. Stretching. Yawning. Making faces. Exercising. Quickening. Parting eyelids. Opening eyes. Seeing. Hearing. Feeling. Kicking. Blinking. Grasping. Turning head. Lowering head. Dropping. Dropping.

Darkness. Struggling. Being pushed. Pushing back. Letting go. Ejection. Separation. Freedom.

New world. Light. Sounds. Air. Breathing. Crying. Detachment. Skin. Lips. Warmth. Familiar heartbeat. Familiar voice. Reunion. Love.

12 Comments
peppermint
12/2/2021 10:56:25 am

This message of life is so powerful in its simplicity. Life! It's all right here.

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Gordon Lawrie (editor)
12/2/2021 12:04:48 pm

I had to check this was just 100 words. The way this story is told is really effective.

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Libby Belle
12/2/2021 12:56:26 pm

The period is a powerful little thing and you showed us how so. And in the end, it's always about love. Sweet. I like it!

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Peggy Gerber
12/2/2021 01:15:49 pm

Brilliant!

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Candace Arthuria Williams
12/2/2021 03:29:45 pm

I have no words. You used them all.

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Kathy K.
12/2/2021 04:00:40 pm

One by one, each word is like a brush stroke as an amazing picture emerges. Magnificent.

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Paritosh Chandra Dugar
12/2/2021 05:13:47 pm

A rare piece of flash.

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Jennifer Duncan
13/2/2021 12:50:42 am

So imaginative. I feel like I need to reread it a couple of words at a time and let them soak in.

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Sue Clayton
13/2/2021 01:26:20 am

Can't add anything more to the above, Don. Wonderful piece.

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Don Tassone link
13/2/2021 09:54:48 am

Thank you all for your thoughtful comments. I was trying to convey the sense of wonder that I feel when I think about the first part of our journey.

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James B. Revell
16/2/2021 12:01:18 pm

Very original in format; thought-provoking in content.

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Don Tassone link
16/2/2021 12:21:53 pm

Thank you, James.

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