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The Long Commute Ahead, by Jim Bartlett

4/12/2020

 
With a last wink at his wife, Martha, Nick slips out the door, ready for his long commute to work. For whatever reason the winter seems colder this year, the snow a little deeper. Maybe it’s just his take, after all, it hasn’t been the best of years. He’s been lucky, though, his crew stayed safe and virus-free. Plus, they didn’t get caught up in the crazy politics. Either could have shut his shop down. Couldn’t have that, there’s too much at stake.

“How are we lookin’?” he asks his foreman, stepping off the porch.

“Sleigh’s loaded and ready, Santa.”
Peggy Gerber
4/12/2020 05:48:18 pm

Very, very clever. Loved it.

Jim link
4/12/2020 05:52:44 pm

Thanks so much, Peggy! Glad you enjoyed it!!
Take care
Jim

Pamela Kennedy
4/12/2020 06:00:25 pm

Let's hope that Santa is able to surprise the children this year...nice story, Jim.

Jim link
4/12/2020 06:13:14 pm

Thanks Pamela - yes, indeed, the kids really deserve a surprise this year!!
Take care
Jim

Mary Wallace
4/12/2020 07:46:35 pm

Loved this Jim. Perfect little twist.

Jim link
4/12/2020 09:15:39 pm

Thanks much, Mary. So glad you enjoyed it!
Take care
Jim

Marjan sierhuis
4/12/2020 07:50:25 pm

Loved your story, Jim.

Jim link
4/12/2020 09:16:53 pm

Thanks so much Marjan!
Hope all is well on your side of the world.

Jim

Michael McCarthy
4/12/2020 10:04:48 pm

Love the way the scene was set, I thought we were in for a serious story. Then, what a super twist. And all this in few words.
Great stuff, Jim

Jim link
4/12/2020 10:31:42 pm

Hey - Christmas can be some serious business! ;-) (Just ask my credit cards!)
Thanks much for the kind comments, Mike
Take care
Jim

Sue Clayton
5/12/2020 12:31:43 am

Go Santa. Delivering cheer not fear. Nice one, Jim.

Jim link
5/12/2020 01:51:33 am

We definitely could all use a little more cheer. Thanks, Sue!
Take care
Jim

Doug
5/12/2020 02:39:03 am

Cute story Jim. Nicely done.

Jim link
5/12/2020 02:51:28 am

Thanks Doug!
Appreciate your taking the time to read and to comment
Take care
Jim

Mike B
5/12/2020 03:07:52 am

Really enjoyed it Jim!!! Way to bring it
up-today, definitely a tough year for Santa this year...

Jim link
5/12/2020 03:38:07 am

Thanks, Mike!! I wouldn't be surprised if Santa gave out a lot of coal this year...
Take care
Jim

Padmini Krishnan
5/12/2020 03:23:43 am

Didn't expect the surprise ending. Enjoyed this story:)

Jim link
5/12/2020 03:39:33 am

Thanks so much, Padmini! I'm glad it caught you off guard, and even more so that you enjoyed it!
Take care
Jim

David
5/12/2020 09:52:23 pm

Always a treat to read one of your stories, Jim.

Jim link
6/12/2020 12:18:20 am

Thanks so much for the kind words, David!
Take care
Jim

Sally link
6/12/2020 02:43:06 pm

Much needed Christmas cheer, joy and hope in here. Thank you.

Jim link
6/12/2020 03:43:27 pm

Thanks ever so much, Sally. Much needed, indeed.
Take care
Jim

Sarah Blum link
6/12/2020 05:22:34 pm

Awesome Jim. I love the way you write at any length.

Jim link
6/12/2020 06:08:42 pm

Thanks so much Sarah! I really appreciate your kind words!
Take care
Jim

Candace Arthuria Williams
8/12/2020 05:24:49 pm

Thanks, Jim. Merry Christmas.

Jim link
8/12/2020 09:31:52 pm

And a Merry Christmas to you, Candace!

Take care
Jim

B. Lynn Goodwin link
28/12/2020 04:01:10 am

Wonderful ending.
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Jim link
28/12/2020 05:12:31 pm

Thanks much!! A Happy New Year to you!
Take care
Jim


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