"It's an illusion...it's an abyss."
"You know what's behind you...go on...see what lies ahead."
Confused, frightened, uncertain. My heart raced wildly and then...
The alarm in the smoke filled hallway woke me up.
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The admonishment had an ominous tone, "Don't go there...go back!." But almost immediately I heard a friendly sounding encouragement, "Proceed. Answer your call for adventure." What followed was overpowering silence except for the drumming of my heart echoing throughout my body. The stygian hallway seemed endless. Only a faint ember appeared in the far distance.
"It's an illusion...it's an abyss." "You know what's behind you...go on...see what lies ahead." Confused, frightened, uncertain. My heart raced wildly and then... The alarm in the smoke filled hallway woke me up.
Sandra James
23/7/2021 11:03:12 pm
Great surprise ending, Pamela! So often dreams coincide with something happening in the real world beside us but I hope I don't experience this one! Well done :)
Jennifer Duncan
24/7/2021 01:18:20 am
That's a scary story. Hope it has a happy ending.
Andrew Carter
24/7/2021 03:30:06 am
Artfully written to make the reader want the character to turn back for the whole story whilst the reader reads on. Great tension.
Sue Clayton
24/7/2021 03:59:51 am
So pleased the batteries in the smoke alarm weren't flat. Nice tale of survival, Pamela.
Sivan Pillai
24/7/2021 05:04:44 am
Lucky that the fire alarm worked. Enjoyed the story, Pamela.
Pamela Kennedy
24/7/2021 04:47:17 pm
Thank you everyone for your comments, which I greatly
Mary Wallace
24/7/2021 05:33:25 pm
So glad you woke up. Nicely done Pamela.
Pamela Kennedy
24/7/2021 10:11:05 pm
Thank you, Mary, for your reading my story. Enjoy your week! Comments are closed.
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