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A Christmas Dream, by Jim Bartlett

18/12/2020

 
Thermometer slid in under her tongue, hot cup of coffee in her hand, Clair lumbers into her office, dark except the answering machine’s orange blinking light and a wall clock taunting her for sleeping in late.

She waves it off. It’s Christmas day, for Pete’s sake. She presses play, then takes a look at the thermometer. 98 – it’s about time. For the last couple of days she’s been fighting a 102 fever, her side burning with pain, her sleep filled with strange dreams. Last night was the craziest, with Santa appearing at her doorstep. But when she greeted him, she saw Comet limping just behind. She checked his leg, wrapped it in gauze, and rubbed his head, and he seemed good to go. Santa, as he left, said she’d not been forgotten.

Weird.

“Nothin’ but a kidney infection,” Doc Graham told her, prescribing a round of antibiotics. “You need to drink more water and quit holdin’ on to your pee.”

Phsst. Let him try driving two-lane backroads for hours, nothing but prairie bushes offering any hope of relief.

The message is from Molly Slayton, or Chumani as she’s called on the Rez because of her dewdrop eyes. She apologizes for phoning on Christmas, but hopes Dr. Clair can see Ellie, her daughter’s palomino.

She shakes her head. If only it could be as easy for the horse as it was for her kidney. Ellie stopped eating the other day, and best Clair could figure was that there was either an obstruction, or, worse, a tumor. Though she’s been a rural South Dakota vet for 20 years, a good chunk of her payments come in the form of fresh eggs, milk, or offers to fix her fence. Out on the Rez, it can be any of the above, but mostly, and best of all, it’s usually a heartfelt hug.

Unfortunately, with that sort of “cash flow,” she hasn’t been able to afford a portable ultrasound machine. So today she’ll have to trailer Ellie up to Mission where Dr. Mitchell can get a peek with his machine.

Deciding she’d better have some breakfast first – eggs, of course – she heads for the kitchen, but stops at the front room. There, on her coffee table, sits a small brightly decorated tree. And just to its side is a rather large wrapped present.

Kneeling down, she peels back the paper to reveal a box labeled:
Mindway M8 Elite Portable Ultrasound Machine.

The gift tag only says, “From Santa.”


* * *

Dakotah crosses the tribal hall, his footsteps creaking on the ancient wooden floor, finally making his way to a smiling Red Cloud, who waits at the back.

“You did it,” Red Cloud says.

“Yes. I dressed in the Santa suit, and knocked at Dr. Clair’s door. But she was more asleep than awake and began putting a bandage on Koda, my dog, calling him ‘Comet.’ So, I ignored her and took in the tree and present.”

“Yes...I just heard that Ellie will be fine.”
Michael McCarthy
18/12/2020 11:23:23 pm

Although it's a short story the character of Clair is strong and convincing. A great story with a super twist for Christmas and as usual I didn't see it coming! Great stuff.

Jim link
19/12/2020 12:33:45 am

Thanks so much for the kind comments, Mike
Really appreciate it.
Take care
Jim

marjan sierhuis
18/12/2020 11:42:16 pm

Jim. This story is absolutely delightful. The vet as a main character is a unique and a terrific idea.

Perhaps a novel involving Dr. Clair as the main character? Food for thought.

Take care.

Marjan

Jim link
19/12/2020 12:35:26 am

The story evolved from something much longer, and it took a pair of large scissors to trim it down to 500 words. Thanks so much for your encouragement and wonderful comments
Take care
Jim

Sarah Blum
19/12/2020 12:22:04 am

Delightful and fun as always with. your stories.

Jim link
19/12/2020 12:36:32 am

Thanks, Sarah. You comments are always much appreciated.
Take care
Jim

Mike B
19/12/2020 01:15:30 am

Nice story Jim!! It was good to escape reality for a few minutes, as I put myself into the world of friction, which seemed like really for a short time...

Jim link
19/12/2020 01:44:19 am

Thanks so much, Mike. Yeah - now and then we all need an escape from reality.
Take care
Jim

Doug
19/12/2020 01:24:50 am

Well done Jim. Thanks for sharing it with us.

Jim link
19/12/2020 01:45:17 am

So glad you enjoyed it, Doug.
Take care
Jim

Sue Clayton
19/12/2020 05:36:10 am

Lovely, just lovely, Jim. I was enthralled from start to finish.

Jim link
19/12/2020 03:30:18 pm

Thanks so much, Sue. You are too kind.
Take care
Jim

Susan F. Reid
19/12/2020 10:17:00 pm

Heartwarming story about rural Americans helping each other.

Jim link
19/12/2020 11:03:04 pm

Thanks, Susan. I'd like to think this goes on all over the country, and world for that matter, without much fanfare. Or maybe without the fanfare it deserves.

Take care
Jim

Mary Wallace
21/12/2020 08:24:01 am

A perfect Christmas story Jim. Merry Christmas to you and yours, and thank you for your creative tales that have helped to make an awful year, a little better.

Jim link
21/12/2020 03:57:28 pm

And a very Merry Christmas to you and yours as well, Mary. Thanks ever so much for the kind words, but they apply to your stories as well. And this year we have most certainly needed that extra help keeping - or sometimes just finding - a smile.
Thanks again
Jim

Kim Favors
2/1/2021 03:19:18 am

I so enjoyed this. I felt a part of Dr. Clair's life from the first sentence. Delightful. A late (just finished reading it) Christmas gift from you.

Jim link
3/1/2021 11:32:11 pm

Wow - thanks so much, Kim!! I am so pleased that you enjoyed it! Christmas can come any time of the year, right? ;-)
Really appreciate your kind comments!
Happy New Year
Jim


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