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A Pivotal Fix, by Jim Bartlett

10/3/2019

 
Grabbing hold of one of the cross arms, Astronaut Raymond Mason pulls himself under the ISS’s solar panel for a better view of the swing hinge. The idea is to get a closer look at the sticky pivot point, but he smiles, for here it is even harder to focus, as the heavenly glow of Earth, 250 miles below, steals both his gaze and his breath. Stretched out before him, it basks in the sun’s light, showing off the varying blues of the oceans, the white of the soft icing-like clouds, the tan of the dry desert sands, and the crusty brown of the mountains, some tipped in bright-white snow. Making it all the more spectacular, the luminescence of Earth, this living, breathing organism, is solidly framed by the deep black of space just behind, its vastness nearly overwhelming. He takes in one last look before turning back to the mount.
The problem practically jumps out at him. A bushing has caught against the rotating arm, leaving metal to rub against metal. He shakes his head at its simplicity, and reaches into his tool pouch, pulling out his wrench. Making sure to lash the lead, he twists around the side and starts to--
“Raymond?”
--loosen the long hinge bolt--
“Hey, anybody there? Earth to Raymond...”
He wants to ignore the call, revel in the moment, but a hand wraps around his ankle and yanks him out from under the Audi.
“Hey, come on, maaaan...that old lady, Mrs. Weathers, is asking about her car. Ya got it figured out yet?”
His boss, Dennis – or, “Rooster” as everyone calls him, with all the strutting he does around the garage – stands over him, hands on his hips. He’s a tall skinny kid, a good 25 years younger than Raymond, who can’t seem to get the hang of shaving or combing his hair, and spits while he talks. But his uncle owns the shop, so...
“Yeah. It’s a bushing on the tie-rod. Just a couple more minutes to slip on a new one. Probably have to check the alignment.”
“Good. So get with it...” Rooster gives a swift kick to the bottom of Raymond’s shoe and disappears back in the office.
With a deep sigh and a shake of the head, Raymond rolls the creeper back under the car.
It’s then, not too far off in the distance, he hears the roaring locomotive fast approaching. As it closes in, the rumble of the tracks reverberate into the trestle pillars, and it shakes him to the very marrow of his bones. Dangling from his rope, 500 feet above the raging river below, Special Ops Agent Raymond Mason realizes he only has a matter of seconds to get the pivot bolt back into the support arm, or the President’s train will go crashing into the canyon in a flaming heap...
Marjan Sierhuis link
10/3/2019 01:37:54 pm

Excellent, Jim. I can see you put a lot of thought into the story.

Jim link
10/3/2019 03:18:06 pm

Wow - thanks much for the kind comments, Marjan!!

Jim

Michael McCarthy
10/3/2019 04:29:33 pm

Lovely descriptions, I was thinking how did he do the research! Again, I was wondering what the twist would be, 'lost in space'? Too obvious . A great ending and reveal. We all need to dream. Great stuff , Mike

Jim link
10/3/2019 04:59:56 pm

Thanks Mike!! As to the research - "One Strange Rock," a National Geographic series now available on Netflix. Thanks so much for the kind comments!
Jim

Don Tassone link
10/3/2019 11:42:46 pm

Raymond’s work will never be dull, for he has found the fix. Well done!

Jim link
11/3/2019 01:13:50 am

He has, hasn't he! Thanks ever so much for the read and the comments, Don!!
Take care
Jim

Doug
11/3/2019 10:08:42 pm

Very nicely done. Easy to picture myself with him

Jim link
11/3/2019 10:48:31 pm

Thanks Doug! Appreciate the read and the comments!!
Jim

Mike B
14/3/2019 06:18:17 am

Great read!! A lesson that a good imagination can make ordinary tasks seem extraordinary and more enjoyable...

Jim link
15/3/2019 01:32:31 am

Thanks eve so much, Mike! Sometimes we need to wander in our minds to stay focused on the daily grind.
Take care
Jim


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