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Before I Left the Garden, by Angela Carlton

3/3/2023

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I knew how to find you.

You were staying with your father in his ranch house on Maple lane. The thing is, I didn’t how I was going to tell you, the truth, those words, the black-hearted tale that would flatten you, but it had to be done.

Before I left the garden, I gathered myself by watering the grounds, my tulips, and the snapdragons, as I drank one cold shot of fireball. I placed a sheer scarf around my neck for comfort. With the silk against my skin, I hoped it would give me the strength to dig between the layers that might set us free.

You were surprised to see me at your door but let me inside. My voice was hoarse, a bit shaky when I told you the things I’d uncovered.

“The thing is,” I swallowed, “You know our friend has been hanging around with Goth kids. Lila's under a spell and not herself. Her behavior is shady. You can’t believe a word, when she says, she wants to be with you.” I pull my scarf close to my throat and breath out of my nose for relief before I say, “I know you love her, but she’s a bit mad. It’s the voodoo, you see. This is the thing you must know.” I whisper it, as he glares at me with dark eyes.

My footsteps are loud, as I try to make my way out quickly, toward the front door. The fat moon has cast its pearly shadow on your lonesome street.

And, it was enough to guide me back home
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Jim Bartlett link
3/3/2023 04:24:36 pm

Those last three lines are just great. (The rest isn't so bad, either ;-)

I want to know more about this girl/woman who is telling him the "truth" and whether or not she is trying to plant seeds for her own garden.
Nicely done
Jim

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Angela Carlton link
3/3/2023 07:06:46 pm

Thank you Jim, the tangled webs some characters can weave...

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Ashley Smallwood
4/3/2023 01:06:14 am

Good story!! Seems like the characters got into some trouble. Makes you wonder what's next...

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Doug
4/3/2023 04:13:23 am

Great job Angela. You leave us wanting more. Well done.

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Brook
4/3/2023 11:46:10 am

I like the way you started this story with I knew where to find you. He was not in the garden,but you were. I enjoy the way you use garden symbolism. You picked the two flowers that say a lot. Two lips and snap dragons, so the two lips of the snap dragon. This explains Lila because she has snapped. Even though he glared at you with dark eyes, you can still go home.

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Natalie
4/3/2023 02:38:19 pm

The Fat Moon has cast its pearly shadow on your lonesome street…wow!! What a remarkably beautiful line. Always love seeing where the next story is headed…just brilliant!!

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JC
4/3/2023 10:16:29 pm

Well that explains everything.......or.....does it?

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