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That Should Have Been Me, by Doug Bartlett

15/4/2022

18 Comments

 
Here I sit in my sparse cell with my head in my hands and the only light being supplied in here is by the few rays of sunlight my diminutive window will let in.

The window is so small I can barely place my face in it. However, I quit looking out it when I realized I could see Executioner”s Hill in the distance. I could see the silhouettes of the prisoners being executed. I was glad I was far enough away that I could not hear their screams of agony and torment. I knew that someday that would be my fate as well.

Each day I could hear the guard’s footsteps as he walked towards my cell. Was he bringing me my food or was today my last day here on this earth?

My heart would plummet when I would first hear those footsteps. But my fears were relieved when my small plate of food would appear through a narrow slot in my locked door. The next day it would start all over again.

My life had been reduced to those two options, only two, food or death. Those options ended up consuming me. That’s all I could think about during my waking hours and even in my sleep they would haunt me with nightmares.

Then one day I heard the guard approaching my cell but this time something unexpected happened that had not happened since I was placed inside. The guard opened the door. He swung it wide open. Well, I knew what that meant. I tried hard to hold back the tears that flooded my face as I realized I would be dead by sunset.

As the door began to open everything moved in slow motion. My thoughts went to my future that was about to be taken away from me. I would never embrace my wife again. I would not be able to see my children grow up. My grandchildren would not have a grandfather to spoil them.

“Get up and get out. You have been freed,” the guard shouted.

My tears flowed even stronger as I never thought that would be an option.

“What do you mean I’m free. How did this happen?”

“You got me. All I know, Barabbas, is that some guy named Jesus took your place.”
18 Comments
Mike Uptain
15/4/2022 02:13:22 pm

Excellent story Doug! Perhaps your best one yet!

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Doug
15/4/2022 04:43:33 pm

Thanks for those kind words Mike.

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Jim Bartlett link
15/4/2022 04:12:23 pm

A "Good" Friday story -
Jim

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Doug
15/4/2022 04:45:00 pm

A good play on words Jim. Thanks for your comment.

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Michael Borjon
15/4/2022 05:18:19 pm

Great story Doug, written from a perspective we should all have, it should have been me.
I believe we’re all prisoners that have the opportunity to be freed by the death of one man…

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Doug
15/4/2022 05:20:47 pm

Thanks Mike. I appreciate your comment.

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Dee Lorraine
15/4/2022 06:04:02 pm

A wonderful timely and timeless story, Doug. Thank you.

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Doug
15/4/2022 08:17:39 pm

Thank you for that nice comment Dee.

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Chuck
15/4/2022 07:24:41 pm

Masterfully done. You had me until the last sentence.

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Doug
15/4/2022 08:18:43 pm

Thank you Chuck. I appreciate your comment.

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Marjan Sierhuis
15/4/2022 08:11:37 pm

Excellent, Doug. I agree with Mike. This could be your best story yet.

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Doug
15/4/2022 08:20:01 pm

Thank you so much Marjan.

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Mary Wallace
16/4/2022 09:39:21 am

Thanks for this story Doug. An Easter gem.

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Doug
16/4/2022 06:33:27 pm

Thanks for those kind words Mary.

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Pamela Kennedy
16/4/2022 01:27:01 pm

So well crafted, Doug....Happy Easter.

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Doug
16/4/2022 06:35:43 pm

Thank you Pamela. He is risen.

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Sue Clayton
17/4/2022 03:25:00 am

Wow, Doug. Brilliant take on a biblical theme.

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Doug
17/4/2022 04:56:13 am

Thank you Sue for that very nice comment.

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