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The Waitress’s Note with the Receipt, Angela Carlton

11/6/2021

 
Max,
I glow a bit when you sit in my section. I wait around again for our lunches or sometimes a long dinner. Most of the time, I find myself undressing you. I think of tracing my finger ever so lightly, circling your arm, creeping down-down until I reach your thigh. I love the way you glare at me with those “icy blues.” Maybe you can read mine and you’ll get warm as the blood rushes-rushes like hot lava. It’s all those thoughts that make me dizzy, sweaty, aching for the unknown.

Your laughter seems to say, “Ain’t got no worries, Babe,” and I smile for hours. When you move, it’s with great ease, that coolness that seems to set me free. When you whisper those lyrics from certain songs, it gives me chills. I write this to tell you, if you ever truly let me in, you won’t need that booze, junk, the damn coke anymore the way my Dad did. The earth tends to rattle and spin when you experience the power of real connection. You see what it means to unleash and sink into someone who has the same heavy vibe and flow much like lava and the sea.

It's a better high Max, a brand new one.

Will we come up if we dive into deep waters?? Maybe, maybe not?

Still, I know there’s a part of you who wants to stay buttoned up and coast along. It’s easier to sit around with old comforts. Isn’t it? It’s easier just to play it safe by the shore. Ultimately, there are some of us who will never leave the shore.

But...
Gordon Lawrie
11/6/2021 01:09:51 pm

Ain't no waitress left me a note like that, Angela...😀

Ashley Smallwood
11/6/2021 01:52:19 pm

Good story! You can feel her emotions.

Angela Carlton link
11/6/2021 01:56:14 pm

Thank you, we should all be so lucky right? These characters are part of a collection I am working on...stay tuned.

Angela Carlton
11/6/2021 01:57:41 pm

Thanks again guys!

Tracy
11/6/2021 02:11:41 pm

Amazing. I truly feel the pent up passion she is describing.

Sivan Pillai
11/6/2021 02:23:54 pm

Beautiful characterization, Anjela.

Jim link
11/6/2021 03:49:25 pm

This is really well done, Angela. Wow - you feel the heat and passion - someone turn on the fan...
Nice!!
Jim

Pamela Kennedy
11/6/2021 04:11:40 pm

WOW!

Natalie
11/6/2021 08:54:50 pm

Come on baby light my fire 🔥 can’t wait to see where this one goes😻

Sue Clayton
12/6/2021 08:17:43 am

What an invitation. This waitress deserves a raise, and not just from her employer.

Brook
12/6/2021 07:36:09 pm

So many people stay on the shore. Max is lucky to have a great invitation to have a richer life. I hope he takes it. I feel like I know Max and my emotions are all hoping he takes the plunge.

Susan F. Reid
12/6/2021 07:50:43 pm

You told us a lot about the waitress, sexually, emotionally, and intellectually. She is a well-developed protagonist.


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