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This Is No Shangri-la, by Marjan Sierhuis

23/2/2021

 
TRAVEL
He stops dead in his tracks. Walking for miles and exhausted, he craves something wet to satisfy his thirst. Head down, hands on his knees, he gulps mouthfuls of air. But bile rises from the back of his throat, and like an unwelcome visitor, it produces a sour taste in his mouth.

The blazing sun reigns down on his head and sweat pours off his back by the bucket-load while his tie-dye shirt and bell-bottom jeans cling to his body, like that of a long-forgotten lover.

Groggy and with no sense of direction, Hawke continues to inch forward on the uneven terrain. Not an easy task in platform shoes which still need to be broken- in.

He stumbles and almost loses his balance, then blinks a few times to try and clear his vision. Barren landscape interspersed with stunted vegetation stretches as far as the eye can see.

He mutters and raises his arms in the air. “This doesn’t look like Shangri-la.”

The time-traveler realizes he must have entered the wrong coordinates once again.

“Back to the drawing board,” he says.
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Sue Clayton
24/2/2021 01:18:14 am

Tye-dyed shirt, bell-bottoms, platform shoes...dress code for Shangri-La back in the day. Loved the story, Marjan.

Marjan sierhuis
24/2/2021 02:02:54 am

Thank you, Sue. I am glad you liked it.

Mary Wallace
24/2/2021 05:03:19 am

Bet he put in 2020 and everyone was in lockdown. Costuming brought back memories.

Jim link
24/2/2021 05:11:55 am

And you have to wonder how many more "back to the drawing boards" there will be in his future...
Nicely done, Marjan
Take care
Jim

Marjan sierhuis
24/2/2021 12:32:38 pm

Thank you Mary and Jim for taking the time to read and for your comments. Have a wonderful day.

Padmini Krishnan
25/2/2021 05:09:08 am

We do all the hard work and at the end realize that we have got some important thing wrong. Well done with a time travel story.

Marjan sierhuis
27/2/2021 06:38:38 pm

Thank you, Padmini.

Jennifer Duncan
25/2/2021 03:51:25 pm

Very entertaining. Haven't we all felt that we were in some kind of weird time/place warp?d Great idea.

Marjan sierhuis
27/2/2021 06:39:44 pm

Thank you, Jennifer. I love watching the old time travel movies.


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