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It's The Louvre, Baby1, by Cindy Patrick

28/2/2021

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FOOD, TRAVEL
At the Bellagio fountains, a jaunty stream of water sprays 
extraordinarily high. Not programed to be a little squirt
What is to notice? Coloured lit water
Off the farm, away from the cubicles or the children, 
this noise is exciting. Mona Lisa exhibit. At Las Vegas. Culture shock.
Do people have tee shirts saying, It’s the Louvre, Baby!?
The engorged shrimp from unknown origins taste dirty to me 
But off the farm, seafood is exciting
Wandering. Gawking. With people who instantly befriend us because we are from Canada, too! 
Mobsters created a façade of decadence. Sin away! 
On the plane ride home, we’ve gotten away 
with something. From something. Vegas tourism thanks us 
for our patronage. We don’t feel dumber, but we don’t feel smarter either. 
As we stare at the Visa statement. I think of the Bellagio fountains. The water 
streams all fighting for more height, more colour. 
More attention. As we all are.
5 Comments
Mary Wallace
28/2/2021 10:57:21 pm

Creates quite a picture Cindy. Vegas in all its 'glory'. James wrote a description of Paris in his longer story, the comparison of the two places is eye opening. Never having been to Vegas, I found your piece really interesting.

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Sue Clayton
1/3/2021 03:29:09 am

I had never to be forgotten experiences in Las Vegas, never actually sinned though, but if someone asks me about trip I'm more than willing to seek attention by saying "what happens in Vegas stays in Vegas". Great descriptive writing, Cindy.

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Andrew Carter
1/3/2021 11:05:38 am

Loved this line, Cindy: "Mobsters created a façade of decadence. Sin away!"
And the last three lines describe all of us (especially creatives), just as the purity of water contrasts the desert.

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Krystyna
1/3/2021 04:51:55 pm

Lots of vivid imagery here, Cindy. Amazing how I see other Canadians pop up at this site.

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Cindy Patrick
4/3/2021 09:54:52 pm

Wow! I really appreciate your comments. My Mum was reminiscing about one trip she and Dad took and the Mona Lisa was displayed at Vegas. I found that a hilarious contradiction. Thank you all for reading and your feedback.

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