SPORT
The bases are loaded
The bat swings. Strike three
A seagull screams
The bat swings. Strike three
A seagull screams
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Sandra James
27/2/2021 09:59:13 pm
As with Andrew's haiku - good things come in small packages. Well done, Marjan, you've said it all in just a few well chosen words.
Marjan sierhuis
27/2/2021 10:47:48 pm
Thank you, Sandra. I found it quite the challenge.
Mary Wallace
28/2/2021 12:59:50 am
Nice Marjan. I do love a good haiku.
Marjan sierhuis
28/2/2021 01:15:17 am
Thank you, Mary. I am glad you liked it.
Sue Clayton
28/2/2021 01:37:26 am
Poor seagull. Hope he hit a home run.
Marjan sierhuis
28/2/2021 02:53:35 am
Hi Sue. Strike three means the batter failed to hit the ball. Don't worry. The seagull is perfectly fine! I put him in my haiku for a reason. I will let the reader use their imagination.
Andrew Carter
28/2/2021 05:30:38 am
Hi Marjan, at first read I thought maybe a bat (only mammal with wings), was swinging from above the stadium. Now, the seagull's scream makes makes me think it screamed, "Out."
marjan sierhuis
28/2/2021 03:44:04 pm
Thank you, Andrew for your feedback. I couldn't have said it better: "A mystery that makes us engage."
Krystyna
28/2/2021 05:42:00 pm
Love your haiku, Marjan. Especially the last line.
marjan sierhuis
28/2/2021 05:59:26 pm
Thank you, Krystyna. I am glad you liked it.
Padmini Krishnan
5/3/2021 05:44:06 am
I interpreted it as an upcoming batter who failed to strike. So, he screamed in his mind as this could mean the end of his career. Or it will be a long time before he is selected again:)
Marjan sierhuis
5/3/2021 09:46:48 pm
Thank you, Padmini for your point of view. Much appreciated. Comments are closed.
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