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Breathless, by Angela Carlton

10/6/2022

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They sent you away. You took a security position in another state at one of those glass buildings that rose up and into the sky. They needed someone who was trained and skilled with a gun. That was you.

I was in the park. You wanted me to meet you in the park when you told me you were leaving with her. I heard sounds of water trickling over the rocks in the fountain, and the katydids humming when I turned my face away.

Once again, someone was wandering off, roaming, leaving-leaving. All those images of my mother walking the streets without shoes, the whispers in her ears more frantic than her rapid thoughts as she talked to herself until she lost her way and would go missing for days. From a distance, a crow called out and circled the sky. I watched as the bird moved round and round with fierce speed until I found the courage to say, “Go, James, you go, follow your path.”

I didn’t hear you pleading, all those breathless words, promises that filled the air. I didn’t hear you, not a word. For you were my childhood pal, you were the safe, loyal friend until this year. Yes, it became, more so much more. You filled the gaps James, all those holes.

I walked on-on-on toward the stone fountain shuffling the coins in my pocket wondering if it was worth it to make a puny wish, wondering if I could bargain with God.
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6 Comments
Ashley Smallwood
10/6/2022 03:38:57 pm

Very good story! You can feel the emotions of the character and it makes you want to read more.

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Angela Carlton link
10/6/2022 04:03:14 pm

Thank you, sometimes the lost can find their way.

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Natalie
10/6/2022 04:35:44 pm

Beautifully written. So much depth. Such an arrangement of emotions.

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Sue Clayton
11/6/2022 06:02:22 am

Abandoned by mother and lover but it never hurts to make a wish.

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Padmini
11/6/2022 08:35:47 am

You can feel the desperation of the narrator and want things to get better for her. Lovely story.

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Sarah Doster
11/6/2022 11:23:03 pm

I feel her heartbreaking again..so emotional…written so well

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