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Cracks, by Angela Carlton

13/1/2023

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You had me believe. We were two schoolgirls, who believed in that thing called, “love,” all those whispers of heavy dreams after midnight. And so we grew up, under the stars, gliding down back roads, chasing boys around the clock.

We swapped sneakers for heels as the years passed and sashayed around in Guess mini skirts singing lyrics to glam rock with pink lips. Later, in college, a third girl became a part of our scene. You took to her immediately, but I found her to be reckless and loud like a freight train without brakes.

Then that day, the one day, when you and I, found the third girl, in bed with my boyfriend, you just glared at me, with those brown eyes that tend to turn black after too much booze. You didn’t pick up the phone when I called you the next day, the day after that, or the day after that either.

The week that followed was blurry. I was numb until I spotted you, You, driving the third girl around on campus. I saw you laughing at the red light. Both of you were laughing.
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Once, yes, you had me believe. You had me believe in friendship, love, the way it can swirl and mold into something grand like wet clay spinning on the pottery wheel until it dries and all the cracks begin to set in.
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Jim Bartlett link
13/1/2023 04:29:09 pm

Once again you've spun a wonderful tale here, Angela that leaves us heartbroken for the young girl - her heart broken. But, also once again, you leave us wondering - there's more to this story.
Well done
Jim

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Angela Carlton link
13/1/2023 04:46:29 pm

Thank you Jim. I always enjoy your feedback. You are an inspiration!

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Doug
13/1/2023 07:45:12 pm

You did a great job here Angela.Like Jim said, your ending sounds like a beginning to another story. Very touching and very well done.

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Johnnycarltonmusic@gmail.com
13/1/2023 10:52:53 pm

Sometimes life rains unpleasantness. This is one way to reach it for sure.

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Natalie
13/1/2023 11:22:53 pm

Angela. As always you have captivated us in the entangled web!! This is exceptional writing and I can’t wait to read more!!

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Brook
14/1/2023 12:03:28 am

Betrayal is one of the hardest things in life. In this story you started to set the mood with heavy dreams at midnight then you gave us the highlights of growing up. The emotional turning point arrives in college and it breaks my heart. Loud and reckless like a freight train without brakes forms a clear picture of what she is facing. Now I am feeling sadness with every paragraph as love dies like wet clay spinning on the pottery wheel and then the crack. I can almost hear the crack. Great job Angela. Perfect descriptions of betrayal at each stage!

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Sue Clayton
14/1/2023 12:38:55 am

A cracking good yarn that was a joy to read.

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Ashley Smallwood
14/1/2023 01:45:22 am

Friendship can be tricky. Sometimes people you believe that are truly your friend end up not to be a true friend really after all.

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Pamela Kennedy
14/1/2023 09:14:12 am

Fabulous story of betrayal.

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Kim Favors
14/1/2023 06:03:56 pm

The pain festers then intensifies. The ending grabbed and shook me.

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