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Dog, by Jim Bartlett

28/2/2020

 
Giving his eyes a good rub, Raymond leans over and fiddles with the radio. Again. He’s been driving for eight hours straight and in the dark, the road ahead seems more fog than asphalt, while the dashed white lines have blurred together as one.

Only twenty more miles, he tells himself. Twenty more miles.

He takes a deep breath – really more of a yawn – and gives his head a shake, before reaching down for a coffee cup he knows is empty, hoping for one more sip. Tired, his finger instead thumps the cup’s side, sending it tumbling to the floor. As he leans trying to scoop it up, the blood-curdling call of an air horn and the screech of tires straightens him as if he were pulled by a rope, and he finds himself staring into the headlights of an oncoming semi.

He’s drifted across the road’s center.

In slow motion, or so it seems, he yanks the wheel, a vain effort to return to his lane. But the sickening smack of metal to metal, a sharp moment of pain, and then darkness, tell him he’s far too late.

He awakens with a start, the bright sun shining down upon him, a cool but welcoming breeze brushing across his face. He’s sitting on a bench in what appears to be a park of some sort, the soothing gurgle of a nearby stream playing in harmony to the rustle of the wind through the trees.

It was a dream. It was all a dream. Smiling, he stands, his attention drawn to a trail that leads toward a tall row of hedges just ahead. He follows the path, eventually coming to a point where the shrubs arch up, forming a wide, rounded opening. Stretched across it, a wrought-iron gate blocks his entrance. Just above, at the peak of the arch, large gold letters spell out, “DOG.”

He stops, his thoughts adrift, but can’t recall a dog park in his hometown.

A bit of movement pulls his gaze to a short lectern standing on one side of the opening, a golden retriever and a spotted dog with long, floppy ears peeking out from behind. The golden cocks her head then smiles, which strikes him as odd.

“Raymond Willows?” she asks.

“Uh...yes...”

“Wonderful.” Rising up to the lectern, she places her paw on a large book. “We’ve been expecting you.”

“You have? Where is this? And how is it that you’re talking? Am I still dreaming?”

The spotted dog steps closer to Raymond and shakes his head. “It’s normal to be confused, Ray. Transition is a hard thing.”

“Transition?”

“Remember the truck, Raymond?”

A shiver races down his spine. “Ugh...”

“You didn’t make it, Ray. But, the good news is—“ the dog points to the arch—“you made it to Heaven!”

Raymond looks up at the gold letters. “Dog?”

“Oh, yeah. That. Sorry. It seems that some of your ancestors had dyslexia. Where you’re from they have the spelling all twisted around."
Pamela Kennedy
28/2/2020 08:56:12 am

Sweet, nice, and very enjoyable!

Jim link
28/2/2020 05:28:33 pm

Thanks so much Pamela! So glad you enjoyed it!
Jim

Marjan Sierhuis
28/2/2020 04:29:46 pm

Jim. Loved your story.
It brought a smile to my face. Whoof.

JIm link
28/2/2020 05:30:02 pm

Awesome! Love it when someone gets a smile out of a story (mine or others for that matter!!). Thanks for the comments!
Jim

Marjan Sierhuis
28/2/2020 04:32:56 pm

Jim. I meant to say woof.

Jim link
28/2/2020 05:31:02 pm

I knew exactly what you meant!
But I'll make sure you get a treat for correcting it. ;-)

Woof right back at you.
Thanks
Jim

Michael McCarthy
28/2/2020 06:36:44 pm

What a clever story! I had no idea where this was going, great story and as usual excellent descriptions

Jim link
28/2/2020 06:50:05 pm

Thanks Michael! So glad you enjoyed the story and thanks for the nice complement on the descriptions!
Take care
Jim

Carol Garrasi
28/2/2020 07:19:46 pm

So very sweet and a nice tribute to lost loved ones. Thanks for sharing this.

Jim link
28/2/2020 08:09:32 pm

Thanks ever so much, Carol. Lost only in body, her spirit lives forever in my heart.

Thanks for the read and wonderful comments
Jim

Doug
28/2/2020 10:05:20 pm

Nice story Jim. I enjoyed the read.

Jim link
29/2/2020 01:55:20 am

Thanks for the read and more so taking a moment to make a comment!
Take care
Jim

Mike B
28/2/2020 11:47:49 pm

Loved it Jim!!! I think Will Rogers said something like this, If dogs don’t go to Heaven, I want to go where dog go...
Made me smile...

JIm link
29/2/2020 01:57:18 am

Will indeed said that!
I'm so glad it made you smile!
I pretty much think of dogs as a smile with a waggly tail

Thanks
Jim

stella gaucher murovic
2/3/2020 02:56:57 am

Jim - I never wanted to go to heaven before but to think that Freeley, Bentley and Karma are all up (or down) there - looking forward to it.
Many thanks - LOL

Jim link
2/3/2020 04:51:39 am

For such selfless and loving souls, their time here on Earth is way too, too short. It sounds like Freeley, Bentley, and Karma have found a piece of heaven in your heart.
Thanks ever so much, Stella, for the read and taking a moment to make my day with such a nice comment. ;-)
Take care
Jim

Ronnie Miller
6/3/2020 12:57:22 am

Love this story!

Jim link
6/3/2020 01:16:28 am

Hi Ronnie - thanks so much. So glad you enjoyed the story!!

Take care
Jim


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