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Don't Miss It! by Doug Bartlett

21/1/2022

 
John was sitting atop of the cab on his boat just a few hundred yards from the Kaanapali shoreline. There was a crowd of onlookers that had gathered looking directly at him, or so he thought.

Unbeknownst to John the sun was setting behind him causing the most beautiful sunset the crowd had ever seen. A spectrum of colored, vertical shafts of light including purple, red, yellow and orange were exploding from the horizon shooting skyward. Not only that but a humpback whale had been breaching in the background and now her and her calf had nuzzled up to the back of his boat. It seemed as if all John had to do was turn around and reach out and he could have touched them…… but he had no clue they were even there.

So what was so distracting to cause John to miss such an extraordinary experience that hundreds of others had observed?

John was busy, too busy, so busy he wasn’t even aware of his surroundings.

So what was it that John was doing to cause him to trade it for what was a once in a lifetime experience?


He was texting. Yes, John was texting on his phone. ​
Don Tassone link
21/1/2022 11:04:18 am

A modern-day parable. Well done, Doug.

Doug
21/1/2022 05:00:06 pm

Thank you Don for your comment.

Mike Uptain
21/1/2022 03:49:37 pm

Great lesson Doug!

Doug
21/1/2022 05:00:50 pm

Thanks Mike.

Gregory Hanger
21/1/2022 03:57:38 pm

I’m sorry Doug, I didn’t finish the story… I was busy sending a text

Doug
21/1/2022 05:02:14 pm

Good one Greg, but I thought we talked about your priorities before.

Jim Bartlett link
21/1/2022 04:47:55 pm

A sad but true tale.
And becoming more and more commonplace
Well done, Doug
Jim

Doug
21/1/2022 05:03:19 pm

Thanks Jim. I appreciate your comment.

Marjan Sierhuis
21/1/2022 06:30:00 pm

Your words described a beautiful scene. But your ending touched on a too frequent occurence. Nicely done, Doug.

Doug
21/1/2022 06:51:43 pm

Thank you so much Marian.

Dee Lorraine
21/1/2022 08:36:40 pm

Doug, you painted a wonderful word-picture of nature in action and ended it with a much-needed wake-up call. Thank you.

Doug
21/1/2022 08:46:36 pm

Thank you Dee for your nice comment.

Mike B
21/1/2022 11:05:47 pm

Great story Doug!! Many Beautiful and Important events can be stolen from us, right before our eyes, by the distraction of this so called “Smart Phone”

Doug
22/1/2022 06:21:32 am

Thank you Mike.

Georgeanne
21/1/2022 11:34:50 pm

Very true Doug! Sad but true!

Doug
22/1/2022 06:23:02 am

Thanks Georgeanne.

Sue Clayton
22/1/2022 05:04:47 am

Oh, Doug. Your last line said it all.

Doug
22/1/2022 06:24:44 am

I appreciate you taking the time to read my story and commenting on it. Thanks.

Cindy Patrick
23/1/2022 04:53:42 pm

I wanted to be there seeing that scene!! And knocking that phone out of John's hands - initially. But then I thought, "what could be in a text that takes over all of that amazingness around him". Intrigue!

Doug
23/1/2022 07:49:52 pm

Thank you Cindy for that thought-provoking comment.

Chuck
24/1/2022 02:10:24 am

I guess some of us don't realize the beauty around us.

Doug
24/1/2022 04:54:31 am

Good point Chuck. Thanks for your comment.


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