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Floating, by Angela Carlton

16/6/2023

 
Before I met you, you’d float around in my head, somewhere. Tall and lean with fierce dimples, and grey eyes. I could see you, the way you walked with ease and spoke with a deep, southern voice like my father. Yes, I always saw my father in you.

It didn’t matter who was with you, your humor lingered in the air with that “ain’t got no troubles, babe,” the kind of laugh that showered the dusty, flat pubs with light. Still, our timing was never right. Was it? When you were abroad, I was home stuck with the feeling of the red-hot Georgia heat trickling over my neck as it slowly rolled right down my spine. When you were single, I was tied down to that loud burly guy or the other one who seemed too clingy, jealous so we stayed blind. It’s easy to remain blind, isn’t it? It’s easy to roam the streets with one’s feet barely touching the ground, a bit empty while the sun continues to shine day after day after day stinging the flesh until a heavy rain rolls in to wash it away.

But the lightning, the thing is, all the lightning above us and around, seems to remain.
Jim Bartlett link
16/6/2023 08:07:13 pm

This is a marvelous opening to something much longer - a book, or even a novella. I feel the sticky humid Georgia heat in your words. And I feel the not quite, but almost desperate heat of what might have been, what should have been. Lightning in a bottle, but the lightning is floating above and around.
A peach of a story
Jim

Angela Carlton link
16/6/2023 09:41:55 pm

Thank you Jim, as always a stellar review of what I tried to portray.

Natalie
16/6/2023 10:22:21 pm

Agree with Jim. Love the imagery. Nice work.

Anthony Ward
16/6/2023 11:38:05 pm

Beautifully descripted and thought out, Angela

Ashley Smallwood
17/6/2023 12:30:46 am

Very intriguing. Keep up the good work.

Marjan Sierhuis
17/6/2023 05:43:14 pm

An absolutely wonderful story, Angela.

Brook
19/6/2023 07:00:36 pm

This story put me in a dream state. I was floating around like a person in love. It was a strong feeling. The lightning is there, but you feel something will have to happen for it to strike.


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