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Jack, by Marjan Sierhuis

11/6/2021

 
He enters the private room while medicinal smells creep under his mask and tease his olfactory receptors.

His solemn gaze shows concern as it settles on his wife’s petite form and pale face. Her chest barely rises and falls with every breath. Once filled with vitality, her body is now motionless under white hospital sheets.

He walks to the bedside and calls out her name. But Michaela remains silent, and her eyes stay shut.

After a restless hour at his wife’s side, Jack runs fingers through his salt-and-pepper hair, and he shakes his head.

He hates this pandemic and feels life isn’t fair. With his heart pounding in his chest, he pulls off his mask, takes a deep breath, and bends down. He gently kisses Michaela’s forehead, and whispers in her ear, “I love you.”

He fails to see a tear roll down her cheek as his childhood sweetheart takes her final breath.
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Jim link
11/6/2021 03:56:34 pm

Powerful, Marjan, and so very emotional.
Well done
Jim

marjan sierhuis
11/6/2021 04:53:16 pm

Thank you, Jim. Your comments are very much appreciated.

Pamela Kennedy
11/6/2021 04:06:55 pm

Your story touched my heart

marjan sierhuis
11/6/2021 04:55:38 pm

Thank you, Pamela for taking the time to read and comment.

Krystyna
11/6/2021 09:37:48 pm

A tragic scene played out countless of times around the world. Here, through your beautiful use of language, profoundly delivered, marjan.

Marjan sierhuis
11/6/2021 10:12:38 pm

Thank you, Krystyna for your kind words.

Sue Clayton
12/6/2021 08:29:39 am

She too grieved with her dying breath. What a sad story, Marjan, but so true for many these days.

Marjan sierhuis
12/6/2021 01:35:39 pm

Thank you, Sue for taking the time to read and comment.

Susan F. Reid
12/6/2021 08:07:16 pm

Marjan,
A heartbreaking story about love.

Marjan sierhuis
12/6/2021 08:18:39 pm

Hi Susan. Thank you for reading.


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