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No One Knew, by Diane Chattaway

7/7/2023

26 Comments

 
No one knew about the old-beat-up Chevy, forgotten in the pines. I found it the day I fled home, seeking refuge from my stepfathers' touch. Its metal carcass beckoned me over, promising shelter from the heat. I spent my summer days there, cradled in its skeleton, safe from the duties made mine in my mother's absence.

I stiffened the moment my bedroom door crept open. His shadow shifting against the wall meant one thing, "Mom was working late."
Not again.
As if they heard my muted cry, the cicadas screamed, their calls carried in the wind, bustling through my window, urging me to visit and infecting my thoughts.
I knew what to do.

"Not here," I whispered, my twelve-year-old voice failing seduction. I slipped from the covers, knowing he'd follow.

Feeding him a whorish delusion that this time, there'd be no fight. I slid into the backseat, seizing a sliver of the broken glass window, and waited.

Summer passes, and I still taste the damp soil masking the decay in that car. An odd comfort.

Cops come with questions. Where is he? Where did he go?

I stay silent, just like he taught me.
I smile because, like the things he's done and the car's existence, "Those answers," No one knew.
26 Comments
Jeff
7/7/2023 10:38:32 am

This is good. I love how you started and ended with the same sentence.

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Diane Chattaway link
7/7/2023 12:40:37 pm

Thank you so much. It was a writing prompt I found on Pinterest. To start and end the story with the same line.

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Kristi
7/7/2023 10:39:51 am

Bravo. Well done. This is sad, because of the nature of it but I like how she got hers in the end.

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Diane Chattaway link
7/7/2023 12:42:06 pm

Thank you. Yes, it I darker subject matter, I maybe should have given it a trigger warning. Hah! Yes! She got hers in the end.

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Mimi Grouse
7/7/2023 10:40:01 am

There is so much atmosphere in this! Great story, Diane!

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Diane Chattaway link
7/7/2023 12:43:36 pm

Thank you. It means a lot hearing that. I am still honing my craft, and atmosphere is one of the things I am working on improving. I appreciate you.

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David
7/7/2023 11:42:32 am

I could see these images. You write well!

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Diane Chattaway link
7/7/2023 12:44:31 pm

Thank you so much. I am trying, so your kind words mean a lot.

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Fred
7/7/2023 11:46:19 am

Good job! 👏

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Diane Chattaway link
7/7/2023 12:45:16 pm

Thank you.

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JP
7/7/2023 12:17:01 pm

Love it 😁

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Diane Chattaway link
7/7/2023 12:46:02 pm

Thanks so much. Appreciate you.

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Bobby
7/7/2023 12:24:51 pm

I love this story, Diane. Great job and the ending leaves me satisfied that vengeance was served!

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Diane Chattaway link
7/7/2023 12:47:07 pm

Thanks, I appreciate ya. Yes. I was happy to give her revenge. Thanks again for the kindness.

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Nick
7/7/2023 12:42:10 pm

Painfully haunting in its content, yet satisfying in its retribution for anyone who ever had to suffer in reality not just fiction. Well written and beautiful in how nothing has to be explicitly said. The insinuations help to tell the story as much as the actual words...

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Diane Chattaway link
7/7/2023 12:51:41 pm

((hugging you so right.)) Thank you, baby. Hah! Yes, I didn't want to go into gory detail. People who have gone through this, know already the horrors of it. Getting revenge has always been a fantasy of mine, and while I can't in real life - I can in story.
Love you.

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Brittany
7/7/2023 01:13:24 pm

You took a difficult topic and made it beautifully written. I enjoyed the imagery you created with the cicadas. It felt like a peaceful summer day, agony left behind.

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Diane Chattaway link
7/7/2023 01:15:26 pm

That's an incredibly kind thing to say. Thank you so much. Love ya, kiddo.

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Rod Drake
7/7/2023 07:04:09 pm

Nice, reads so smooth, so the story seems true and real

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Diane Chattaway link
7/7/2023 09:09:00 pm

Thank you so much. That's very encouraging to hear!

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Pamela Kennedy
7/7/2023 08:51:19 pm

Well done!

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Diane Chattaway link
7/7/2023 09:09:44 pm

Thanks so much. :)

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Rachel
7/7/2023 10:19:37 pm

Well written and sad. I do love when people get what they deserve. Nice work. ❤️

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Diane Chattaway link
7/7/2023 11:28:24 pm

It is sad. Sad that things like that happen all of the time. :( I am with you 💯. Karma is a "Bleep" and I am here for it! Thank you so much for the kind compliment. I'm still trying to find my voice, so it's encouraging. I appreciate you.

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Sue Clayton
8/7/2023 01:53:50 am

Vivid in its content and the images it evokes. A strikingly good piece of prose.

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Diane Chattaway link
8/7/2023 02:17:37 pm

That's an incredibly kind thing to say. Thank you. You made me smile. Appreciate you.

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