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Perfect Timing, by Dee Lorraine

28/1/2022

 
Sharon was back at Abull’s Burgers, picking up her usual takeout order: Number 6, no onions.

“Thanks, Mr. Abull. You make the best bacon cheeseburgers in town. They’re heavenly!”

“God is good, Sharon, God is good,” responded the white-haired proprietor.

“Yes, He is, Mr. A.”

She turned from the counter, almost colliding with a tall, dark, handsome man wearing jeans and a black parka.

“Finally! I thought I’d never see you again! I’ve been looking for months!”

“Excuse me?”

“When I was hungry, you fed me. When I was thirsty, you gave me a drink.”

“What?”

Their eyes met again.

She gasped. “The Number 12!”

He grinned and nodded.

“But that was last summer! And how…”

“I had flown into town the previous night. I had a job interview with a company in the Bosco Building, across the street from the park. I took an Uber from the hotel to the interview that morning and used Apple Pay.”

“After the interview, I couldn’t find my wallet. I didn’t know it had fallen out of my pocket onto the car floor. I was hungry, thirsty, and in a new city hundreds of miles from home. I didn’t have any cash or identification. My hotel was a couple of miles away, so I crossed over to the park to regroup.”

“You were alone on the bench. Your head was down, and your eyes were closed. I didn’t know if you were napping or praying, so I just sat quietly on the opposite bench.”

“You looked up, came over, handed me the bag, and left. You seemed to be in a hurry, so I just said thank you.”

“I had dozed off and was about to be late for work,” Sharon said. “But how…”

“The bag had the restaurant logo and phone number on it. Mr. Abull said you come in often but not on any schedule. I’ve been checking here every week for seven months since then, except when I’m out of town for work.

"I had almost given up hope, but I heard a still, small voice say, ‘Go again.’ So I did. Perfect timing.”

“Wow…” Sharon said softly.

"I’m Josiah Portman, deputy chief design engineer for Troubadour & Dancer Construction. My office is in the Bosco Building. The interview went well.” He smiled.

“I’ve got to get back to work, and I don’t want to delay you, Sharon.”

After taking a deep breath, Josiah continued.

“Since you like beef, may I take you to dinner at Capital B’s Friday night? They serve the best steaks in town. Heavenly.”

It was Sharon’s turn to smile.
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Dee Lorraine
28/1/2022 02:24:46 pm

Sue Clayton’s comment on my 100-word story, “Special Order,” inspired this story. Sue wrote: “Maybe they'll meet up again at Abull's and share another lunch, this time together.”
Thank you, Sue! Links to the story and the video I made for it are below:
“Special Order” on Friday Flash Fiction:
https://www.fridayflashfiction.com/100-word-stories/special-order-by-dee-lorraine
“Special Order” story video on YouTube:
https://youtu.be/kRoxN2RPkvU

Jim Bartlett link
28/1/2022 04:35:52 pm

Lovely story, Dee, and I love your note about Sue's inspiration.
Nicely done
Jim

Dee Lorraine
29/1/2022 09:00:15 pm

Thank you, Jim. I had fun writing this story in response to Sue's comment.

Doug
28/1/2022 06:37:04 pm

Dee, I love this story, especially the way you sprinkled it with spiritual cues throughout. Thank you very much, very uplifting.

Dee Lorraine
29/1/2022 09:02:27 pm

Thank you, Doug. I appreciate your noticing the spiritual cues and am glad you enjoyed the story.

Don Tassone link
28/1/2022 07:08:17 pm

Sweet story and a good example of how members of this FFF community inspire one another. Thanks, Dee.

Dee Lorraine
29/1/2022 09:04:44 pm

Thanks, Don. I learn so much from the stories and comments here in the FFF community.

Marjan Sierhuis
28/1/2022 07:25:23 pm

A delightful and happy story, Dee. Thank you.

Dee Lorraine
29/1/2022 09:05:35 pm

I'm glad you enjoyed it, Marjan.

Sue Clayton
29/1/2022 02:38:11 am

“When I was hungry, you fed me. When I was thirsty, you gave me a drink.” Biblical words of inspiration inside an inspired sequel.

Great story and great video, Dee. Well done.

Dee Lorraine
29/1/2022 09:56:01 pm

I'm glad you enjoyed the story and video, Sue, and I appreciate your acknowledging the Scripture reference. And thanks again for your original comment on "Special Order."

David Ngo
29/1/2022 04:08:00 am

I enjoyed the story as much as the video. Very well done Dee, again.

Dee Lorraine
29/1/2022 09:57:58 pm

I'm glad you liked the story and video, David. Thanks for watching. I had fun doing both.

Candace Arthuria Williams
29/1/2022 02:40:20 pm

I love the number 12, a regular in Scripture. As for that dinner, I'd go with honey-coated fish. God, Christ Jesus, and I have that in common. Oh, a land of almond milk and honey! Can't wait 'til we can have it together. Beautiful Bible Study in that story, Dee.

Dee Lorraine
29/1/2022 10:04:29 pm

Thank you, Candace, I appreciate your noticing that I was drawing from Scripture. I'm looking forward to the big family reunion, too!

Alyce
3/2/2022 02:04:16 am

This is beautiful, Dee!

Dee Lorraine
4/2/2022 10:54:43 pm

Thank you, Alyce! I'm glad you enjoyed it.


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