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Raindrops Keep Falling on my Head, by Doug Bartlett

7/1/2022

 
What in the world was going on? Whatever it was, the noise was coming from the old man’s backyard who lived down the street. The other day he had a lot of lumber delivered and now you could hear lots of sawing and hammering going on.

This was like a magnet to the group of adolescent boys who were playing nearby. Curiosity got the better of them and before you knew it they had stopped playing and were craning their necks to see what was going on behind the fence. But it was an exercise in futility as the fence was much taller than them with not even one knothole for them to peer through.

A month later they could see a structure beginning to appear above the fenceline stretching towards the sky.

“What could it be?“ they thought.

They decided that a couple of them would follow the old man around to see if they could figure out what he was up to.

They soon discovered the old man was a very kind, compassionate and righteous man, always doing the right thing . His neighbors, on the other hand, were quite the opposite.They were always treating everyone with wickedness and evil. Many times the old man would tell them that God wasn’t pleased with their behavior and they needed to change their ways.

His neighbors didn’t want to hear that. They jeered at him, mocked him and cursed him. However, the old man never got mad. He would just go away with a broken heart.

Sometimes the boys would peek through the old man’s window and could see and hear him praying for his neighbors.

One day the old man was talking to a large group of people in the marketplace. There was urgency and compassion in his voice. He told them again that they must turn from their wicked ways. God wasn’t happy with them and they were quickly running out of time.

One of the men in the crowd bent down to pick up a rock to throw at the old man and as he straightened up a large raindrop, the first of many, fell out of the sky and landed between his eyes .

“Look old man, we’re sick and tired of your rambling at us. Just get out of here and leave us alone,“ he blurted out.

“I’ve tried and I’ve tried. I have done everything I can to try and save you. You are now on your own,“ Noah said and then returned to his home to put the finishing touches on the ark and load the cargo.
Jim B link
7/1/2022 07:25:42 am

Maybe he needed B.J. Thomas to sing if for him - but, now that I think about it, that didn't help Butch Cassidy and the Sundance Kid either...
Nicely done
Jim

Doug
7/1/2022 08:49:42 pm

Thanks Jim. I'm with you on BJ but you lost me on Butch and Sundance.

Jim link
7/1/2022 08:51:55 pm

It was one of the songs played in the movie, "Butch Cassidy and the Sundance Kid." (I only know because of Google. Never watched the movie - you already know how it's going to end.)

Candace Arthuria Williams
7/1/2022 05:04:53 pm

You got me again, Doug. Love what you do to keep the Scriptures alive and contemporary.

Doug
7/1/2022 08:51:38 pm

Thank you for your nice comment Candace. I appreciate it.

Dee Lorraine
7/1/2022 05:22:29 pm

I love this telling of Noah's backstory, Doug. Thank you.

Doug
7/1/2022 08:53:01 pm

Thank you Dee for taking the time to read and leave a comment.

Mike B
7/1/2022 10:07:08 pm

Great job Doug!! I had my suspicions that it was Noah about 3/4 of the way through.
You nailed it, I really enjoyed the read!!

Doug
8/1/2022 12:12:23 am

Thanks Mike. Glad you enjoyed it.

Marjan Sierhuis
7/1/2022 10:26:45 pm

A wonderful story, Doug.

Doug
8/1/2022 12:14:06 am

Thank you so much Marjan.

Mike U
7/1/2022 10:51:31 pm

Great perspective Doug, thank you!

Doug
8/1/2022 12:15:06 am

Thank you Mike.

Georgeanne B
7/1/2022 11:15:12 pm

Interesting perspective. Enjoyed it!

Doug
8/1/2022 12:16:18 am

Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Sue Clayton
8/1/2022 03:04:20 am

A biblical story wonderfully revisited.

Doug
8/1/2022 05:02:30 am

Thank you Sue for those kind words. I certainly appreciate it.

Chuck J Anderson
9/1/2022 03:41:56 am

I enjoyed your contemporary twist.

Doug
9/1/2022 05:57:08 am

Thank you very much, Chuck.


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