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The Encore, by Jim Bartlett

29/10/2021

 
There’s a fire inside of me – one that wishes it could burn on and on – yet my time is ever so short. Those flames, once brightly flickering in my eyes, now glow dimly, and my final hour draws near.

No one has said as much, but it became obvious when the stream of visitors began arriving at my door this evening. One after the other they marched in a long parade, most of whom haven’t been around since last year, and each averting their eyes to avoid staring at the look of terror carved into my face.

They’re all gone now, I lie here alone. But not for long, as I know that the kind lady who’s been taking care of me will soon make her appearance. And when she does, it will mean that the hands on my clock are about to tick their last tock. Light’s out, so they say.

If only there was a little more time. Just a few more magical moments to make someone smile.

If only...

The door opens and there she stands. Our eyes meet, both of us knowing what comes next and wishing there was some other way.

She gives a wistful sigh, moves to the front of me and leans close. But a noise from behind gives her a start, and she spins around. A small white van is parked just beyond the fence, and two more visitors are making their way up the walk.

“Oh, my, you’re just in time,” she says, a note of relief in her voice.

“Trick or treat,” the two, both in costumes, say together.

“Just a minute, I’ll get the candy.”

“Wow...cool Jack-o’-Lantern,” the taller one, definitely a girl, says, pointing at me. “Did you carve him yourself?”

“Yes I did. Thank you.” She takes another one of those wistful sighs.” I was actually just getting ready to blow out the candle.”

“Oh, no,” says the smaller one – a boy, I do believe. “What will happen to him?”

“I’ll probably take it, ah, him, out to the forest for the animals.”

The two look at me, then look at each other, then back to me again. Finally, the girl takes a step forward.

“Could we have him? We didn’t get one this year at the shelter.”

The lady’s eyes widen, her face goes pale. Slowly she moves over to the edge of the porch and takes a long look at the van. She must see the same thing as I do, because she puts an open hand to her mouth.

The sign on the side says: Crimson County Child Services

When she turns back to the kids, her eyes are filled with tears.

“Yes...yes you most certainly may have Mr. Jack-o’-Lantern. And the rest of my candy bowl. Let me carry them out to your van for you.”

The two light up as if they, too, have a candle deep inside.

Well, I guess this isn’t the end of the line for me after all...
David Lowis
29/10/2021 02:36:37 pm

I'll never look at Jack-o'-Lanterns in the same way again. Good story, as always, JIm.

Jim link
29/10/2021 03:10:33 pm

Smile - thanks much, David. So glad you enjoyed the story. ;-)
Take care
Jim

Mike B
29/10/2021 04:01:22 pm

Fun Story Jim!!! Loved it!! Very Enjoyable and perfect timing. Great imagination…
Happy Halloween 🎃

Jim link
29/10/2021 04:11:54 pm

Thanks, Mike! And a Happy Halloween to you as well!
Take care
Jim

Michael McCarthy
29/10/2021 04:09:49 pm

Great build up as usual, super descriptions and a lovely and appropriate ending
Nice one, Jim

Jim link
29/10/2021 04:12:47 pm

Thanks ever so much, Michael. I really appreciate your comment!!
Take care
Jim

Marjan Sierhuis
29/10/2021 04:12:55 pm

Another wonderful story, Jim. Please keep them coming.
.

Jim link
29/10/2021 10:01:53 pm

Thanks ever so much Marjan!
Always appreciate your kind comments.

Jim

David Chek Ling Ngo
29/10/2021 05:03:48 pm

Great story Jim. I always enjoy your stories and how they flow beautifully.

Jim link
29/10/2021 10:03:08 pm

Thanks David! I hope I can continue to live up to that high standard you've set for me. ;-)
Jim

Doug
29/10/2021 05:14:02 pm

Excellent job Jim. Nicely done. Thanks.

David Milner
29/10/2021 08:16:28 pm

Light me up, Jim B.

Jim link
29/10/2021 10:04:48 pm

You got it, David ;-)
Thanks for the read and comment!
Jim

Jim link
29/10/2021 10:03:58 pm

Thanks ever so much, Doug. So glad you enjoyed it and thanks again for the comment.
Jim

Sue Clayton
30/10/2021 02:40:25 am

Just so lovely, Jim. This encore deserves a standing ovation.

Jim link
30/10/2021 03:49:02 am

You are too kind, Sue. I applaud you for taking a moment to make such a nice comment. ;-)
Take care
Jim

Padmini Krishnan
30/10/2021 02:22:12 pm

Just googled Jack-o’-Lanterns to learn more about them. This has such a compassionate ending and is a lovely story.

Jim link
30/10/2021 03:37:30 pm

Those little carved up pumpkins are quite interesting, aren't they?
Thanks ever so much for your wonderful comment, Padmini.
Take care
Jim

Carol Garrasi
30/10/2021 03:17:16 pm

So very sweet. I love the way you give life to the lifeless. I'm glad it worked out for everyone in the end. Thanks so much for another enjoyable read.

Jim link
30/10/2021 03:39:28 pm

Thanks so very much, Carol. I always look forward to your comments.
And I am so glad you enjoyed the story.
Take care
Jim

Candace Arthuria Williams
30/10/2021 06:03:23 pm

You really ran the gamut of emotions here, Jim. Light at the end of the tunnel indeed. Marvelous, simply marvelous!

Jim link
30/10/2021 09:37:09 pm

You are too kind with your words, Candace. Thanks so very much.
Take care
Jim

Mary Field
30/10/2021 11:31:58 pm

Great Story, and perfect timing. Never know what will happen next, except it has to be good, right???

Jim you are talented, in many ways. I am glad to have known you during our years at TelCo.. always knew you had many special talents.

Jim link
31/10/2021 01:39:29 am

Mary, you are very sweet and I thank you very much for your kind comments. And it was a pleasure knowing you through all those years at GTE as well!!
Take care
Jim


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