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The Escape, by Jim Bartlett

19/11/2018

 
Ahead she sees the first thin ribbons of sunlight breaking through the overhead branches and leaves, and it sparks hope that her trek through the dark forest might be finally coming to an end. Both her pace and heart quicken as the trail takes her up and down, weaves this way and that, each step heightening her expectation that the thicket will give way to a grassy plain, a rich valley, or maybe the vastness of the sea. But it’s not until she crests the ragged last ridge does the canopy of trees open up, exposing a sky so blue it steals away her breath, gives rise to goosebumps along her arm. She stops at the summit, turning her head into a slight breeze that carries a hint of ocean salt.

For a moment she almost can hear the waves, crashing against rocks and sand in a ritual that has carried forth since the dawn of time. But out of the corner of her eye something else calls her attention, and she turns back. On the far horizon a single white cloud forms the backdrop to an ancient castle sitting atop an emerald green knoll. Each of its many towers boasts a flag, their colors brilliant, their emblems mysterious and yet inviting. The drawbridge is down, cutting a thick gray line across the inky black moat.

She again catches her breath. From deep inside a feeling, a familiar one at that, churns, and she knows something is about to happen. The trees behind her, the sky above, even the wind, settle in the silence of anticipation.

Then, the gate, a set of iron bars with sharp arrow tips at the top, begins to rise, the creak of its chains echoing across the canyon. A rider—a knight, his polished armor aglow in the midday sun--emerges, his horse a glossy back, its mane long and wild. The breath she held she finally releases in a gasp, as the horse and rider make their way across the bridge, a slow clump-clump of the horse’s hooves against the wood.

Yet, even with such a magnificent sight, another sound, this one far off in the distance, latches onto her ear. She turns, thinking at first it might be the long-horns of the neighboring kingdom, trumpeting in announcement of an approaching parade of horses ridden by knights in gray. She closes her eyes, imagining their gloved hands, how they hold their lances high, for their intent is to challenge the knight.

But, no, the sound is more distinct. A repetitive beeping. Persistent. Annoying. Her shoulders slump, her head drops, for it is only then she realizes her phone, set to go off at the end of her lunch, is performing its task.
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With a heavy sigh, she marks her page, folds the book closed, and makes her way back to her desk.
Mike
20/11/2018 04:56:22 am

Another Good One Jim!!! You slowly took me back to a time long ago, and then yanked me quickly back to the present and reality. I loved the surprise ending. It reminded me of times when I was having a good dream that seemed so realistic, and then, unexpectedly, my alarm went off. What a unique feeling that is...

Jim link
20/11/2018 05:08:54 am

Thanks Mike!! I hadn't thought of it from a dream perspective, but that works, too! I know that I can easily get lost in a really good book, and you have a tough time putting it down.

Thanks again
Jim

Michael McCarthy link
20/11/2018 02:47:06 pm

Beautifully descriptive, setting the scene for something!
When it came it was was a big surprise! Looking back now there was a dream like quality to the story.
Excellent Jim!

Jim link
20/11/2018 03:52:20 pm

Thanks ever so much Mike for your comments! Coming from someone who excels at descriptions, your compliment is much appreciated!
Thanks again
Jim

Sarah Blum link
28/11/2018 04:24:28 am

Wonderful story Jim, as usual. I was totally in it and on top of the crest. That is how it is for me when I am writing, I am so deep into it that I do not recognize the sound of the phone when it rings. In your story though she becomes creative imagining something- until she is brought back to where she is by the sound of her phone. So she was reading, not dreaming. Big surprises await us when we read your stories.

Jim
28/11/2018 04:38:56 am

Wow - thanks ever so much for the kind words, Sarah! I think because I am that way sometimes both with writing and reading, I found this story wandering about in my head.
Thanks again - appreciate the read and comments!
Jim


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