Mukesh could not remember why 447 had always been his lucky number. But when his 401K reached 445, the market began to tumble. Every breath he took had the singular goal of getting his money back. It was all he lived for. And so the count-up began, as the market slowly recouped its losses. Mukesh pulled out his iPad to check the balance on his account—$447,363.02—immediately setting his sights on half a million. He picked up the remote to hear the latest death toll. 447,000. Was that some kind of an omen? Seconds later, the hospital phoned. His wife, an “essential worker,” made 447 and one.
The race had begun long before it made history. From the time Mukesh was old enough to talk, his parents had filled his head with the platinum-paved streets of America. In this faraway fairy tale place, everybody was rich with equal opportunity to get richer. When the time was right, the family boarded the plane, as Destiny lifted welcoming arms to embrace its latest recruits. A boy of eight, a family of three, and fortunes not yet counted.
Mukesh could not remember why 447 had always been his lucky number. But when his 401K reached 445, the market began to tumble. Every breath he took had the singular goal of getting his money back. It was all he lived for. And so the count-up began, as the market slowly recouped its losses. Mukesh pulled out his iPad to check the balance on his account—$447,363.02—immediately setting his sights on half a million. He picked up the remote to hear the latest death toll. 447,000. Was that some kind of an omen? Seconds later, the hospital phoned. His wife, an “essential worker,” made 447 and one.
Peggy Gerber
16/10/2020 08:23:54 pm
What a beautifully written story with so many different layers. A young man chasing after the American Dream, doing everything he can to get rich, and ultimately learning the hard lesson that there are things in life a lot more important than money.
Mary Wallace
16/10/2020 09:17:59 pm
Excellent story Candace, capturing how hard it is to gain, and how easy it is to lose. 16/10/2020 10:25:07 pm
Wow, a twisted, surprise ending that you 17/10/2020 12:54:59 am
Thanks Candance for your insight on my story. I think the main point I wanted to display is people connect on deep levels when it comes to loss not that he was a player, but a lost soul and connected with her through pain. Still, I love the way folks see other themes with our stories, the beauty of ART.
Sue Clayton
17/10/2020 04:03:37 am
Your last words made my blood run cold. His market losses might continue to grow, but this loss can never be recovered.
Candace Arthuria Williams
17/10/2020 12:58:14 pm
Thank you all for your encouragement---and Angela, for clarification. Sue, as usual, you nailed it. Blessings over everybody's work.
Marie Johnson-Ladson
17/10/2020 05:57:32 pm
Great story, the moral of the story is money is not
Candace Arthuria Williams
17/10/2020 07:58:09 pm
Peggy and Marie, thanks for your thoughtful commentary. I can see that you grasped the message.
Helen L. Ray
18/10/2020 02:00:06 am
Well written. Very sad circumstance. One has to come to his or her own maturity to realize what’s most important in life and try to balance other life desires “around” that. Also, it’s not to say that Mukesh didn’t value his wife as much as his desire to gain wealth. Life is unpredictable.
Candace Arthuria Williams
18/10/2020 04:01:01 am
Jim and Helen, thanks for taking the time to read my work. I appreciate your insight.
Eunice Pruitt
19/10/2020 04:04:52 am
Well structured story. It reminds me of some relatives who played the same number all their lives hoping to win big but never did. Your story had an unexpected ending and sgesa light on what is really important in life.
Candace Arthuria Williams
21/10/2020 05:15:30 pm
Thanks for your time and encouragement, everybody.
DiAna
24/10/2020 01:46:01 am
Surprising ending. Unexpected. Comments are closed.
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