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The Fourteenth Day, by Angela Carlton

16/10/2020

 
The first time we have coffee after psychology class, you laugh as I pour too much sugar in my over-sized mug, and it’s refreshing to see the humor behind small cravings.The second time we met, I learn you take your coffee black and the real reason you are drawn to psychology as you speak of that dark day your sister jumped off the bridge as a girl. The third time we met on Monday, I told you about my father and how he left us when I was a boy. And the way I foolishly search for him in a crowd as if a reunion with him, the father of my emptiness would make a damn difference now.

The next week, I shaved and trimmed my hair, and my skin’s got some color. It’s all those lonely hours you see, between classes, sitting under the scorching sun watching the waves crash and spill, crash and spill over the rocks.

On the fourteenth day, I am thinking of you-you-you, how I want us to forget the coffee and drink cold beer in a pub under the low lights, down the street. I want to drink beer with you, rum and vodka, all of it, as my fingers brush against your neck, while my wife does her rotations at the hospital.

See, it’s her job to save people.
Mary Wallace
16/10/2020 09:13:12 pm

Beautifully written Angela.

Angela Carlton link
16/10/2020 09:58:06 pm

Thank you Mary! I liked yours too. I'm going to make a comment now :)

Candace Arthuria Williams
17/10/2020 12:31:25 am

How interesting that you wrote from a man's perspective. I don't like him, but you did an effective job of portraying a sentimental cad. I wish he had saved some of that sentiment for his wife.

Abby
17/10/2020 12:41:48 am

Amazing Angela! So love your writing! ❤️

Sue Clayton
17/10/2020 04:00:20 am

Definitely not the ending I was expecting, Angela. You played me well.

J.Carlton link
18/10/2020 03:42:44 am

Cool O'henry ending!

M Tyson
18/10/2020 04:45:45 am

Is he a golfer? I’m curious, not because I have anything against golf or golfers. He just seems like he might me a golfer because he never mentioned the waves rolling in before they crashed on the rocks. He seemed more focused on the water on the rocks than the waves before they got there. I think the surfer would be more into his wife and the waves than the rocks, the other chick, and the liquor drinks.
I’m just kidding.
I loved it.
Is he a golfer, surfer or neither? Just checking.

Pamela Kennedy
24/10/2020 03:32:52 pm

Cleverly written...enjoyed your story.


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