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The Parting, by Jim Bartlett

5/10/2018

 
A gray shadow begins to fill the room, slowly working its way into her heart, as she watches him stuff the last of his shorts into his pack. She struggles with her breathing, mostly in trying to hold back the tears.

“Do you really have to go?” Though her voice is not much more than a whisper, it still cracks on the word, “go.”

“I’ll be back,” he replies. “And, anyway, Autumn is coming to stay.”

“Right. For three whole months. Then what? I’ll be left in the cold.”

He turns to face her and she notices that the daisy hanging from his pocket has wilted, the few petals remaining faded from white to yellow.

“Look, I’ll be back in May. June at the latest. You know we go through this every year.”

She lets her head drop, giving it a slight shake. “I know, I know. But it’s so hard to let go. And May seems to take forever. I just wish it could be different.”

He smiles, gives her a hug, then tosses the pack over his shoulder. “May. I promise.”
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“May.” A single tear finds its way down her cheek. “But I’m going to miss you, Summer...”
Carol Garrasi
5/10/2018 04:41:28 pm

ABSOLUTELY LOVED IT!!

Jim link
5/10/2018 05:01:09 pm

Thanks for the read and the nice comments, Carol!!

Michael McCarthy link
5/10/2018 06:28:48 pm

Very clever and and unexpected twist. A great example of flash.

Jim
5/10/2018 07:02:28 pm

Thanks Mike. Appreciate the read and comment!!!

Sarah Blum link
8/10/2018 02:43:46 am

Very well written story Jim, with an awesome ending! Way to go!

Jim link
8/10/2018 03:01:23 am

Thanks so much for the read, Sarah. Glad you liked it!!!

Maryanne Boyd
1/11/2018 04:49:39 pm

Jim,
I love the story...this was me every year when we lived in Pa. Of course summer is much longer where we live now!🏝

Jim link
1/11/2018 04:57:11 pm

I know the feeling!! I used to live in the perpetual summer of Santa Barbara, but since being up here in the Northwest, the "getting used" to the seasons seems to be a never ending process. From the first day the temps begin to drop and the sun goes down a little earlier I begin to miss summer...


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