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The Transition, by Doug Bartlett

18/6/2021

 
She was terribly fearful of what was about to happen to her. She would soon transition from her current level of life to the next. She felt like she had barely existed and now her time was up. Her life had sped by like a high speed bullet train. She was quite anxious about leaving her comfortable surroundings, where all her needs were met and she felt completely safe and secure. She couldn’t understand what was suppose to be so great about this next life. Sometimes she even wondered if there really was one. Supposedly you would see a tunnel and there would be a bright light at the end of it.

Her biggest fear was the unknown. There was simply no way to know what lay ahead for her in the near future. She would do anything to stay where she was.

“ Why did she have to leave? ” she thought, “ Why couldn’t she stay here, if not forever, then just a while longer ? “

It did not seem fair to her at all. But no, it was not to be. She knew her time had come as she apprehensively and reluctantly entered the birth canal.
Susan F. Reid
18/6/2021 12:42:43 pm

Great story, Doug. So clearly written and with a tremendous twist.

Doug
18/6/2021 06:55:47 pm

Thank you so much Susan. I appreciate your kind comments.

Jim link
18/6/2021 03:43:29 pm

Nice twist there at the end. Was not expecting that one!
Take care
Jim

Doug
18/6/2021 06:57:57 pm

Thanks Jim. I'm glad I was able to catch you off guard..

Mike B
18/6/2021 06:00:25 pm

A Perfect comparison of people not wanting to leave the familiar surroundings of this world to go to the next one. There is however
One Way to gain a Peace and Assurance about life after death, a relationship with Christ Jesus the Lord of All…

Doug
18/6/2021 06:59:44 pm

I appreciate your comments Mike. Thanks.

Peggy Gerber
18/6/2021 07:21:11 pm

A beautifully written story. I loved the twist at the end.

Doug
18/6/2021 07:37:28 pm

Thank you Peggy for those very kind comments.

Pamela Kennedy
18/6/2021 07:49:05 pm

Quite a lovely story with a surprise ending..

Doug
18/6/2021 09:21:52 pm

Thank you so much for your nice comments Pamela.

Sue Clayton
19/6/2021 06:14:00 am

The trauma of childbirth that faces us all. Let's hope for most of us the canal journey was worth the transition.

Doug
19/6/2021 05:49:38 pm

Good point Sue. Thanks for your comment.

Mary Wallace
19/6/2021 04:57:22 pm

And the comment from the mother."Out; if you think you're staying there you have another think coming."🤣🤣

Doug
19/6/2021 05:51:04 pm

Well put Mary. Thank you.


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