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The Voice of Loss, by Angela Carlton

4/11/2022

 
Somebody was knocking on the door. Through the window I could see, a stranger standing on my porch. He was tall and well-built. There was something mysterious about him. I stood there in my black hat and glared at him until the yellow leaves began to stir around him, a barn owl looked down with glaring eyes. The owl’s white face always brightens the night sky around my yard like a porch light.

“There’s no trespassing here so move on! I’m warning you, move on!” I shout, before the stranger bangs once again on the door. I can hear the barn owl hooting now as the knocking continues. I stand there in a trance. Something came over me as I began to hear a faint whisper. It was a voice I’d never forgotten, the voice of my childhood, the voice of loss. This voice was the voice of my deceased mother.

“You must stop practicing voodoo! You must let go of the anger and forgive! You must find a way to forgive, Shelly. Do not cast this man into darkness” Tears began to stream down my face as the knocking started to diminish. I stood there frozen. I could not move my feet and the tears flowed. I sunk to my knees from the power of your voice, the voice I had waited to hear since I was a confused teenager.

When I woke up later on the floor, the sky was as black as Georgia asphalt and the beautiful owl was perched perfectly in my tree glaring at me behind the glass as the katydids sang a harrowing tune.
Natalie
4/11/2022 04:58:34 pm

Love the imagery, as always! Wow what story! Listen to your Mother, Shelly!

Angela Carlton link
4/11/2022 06:45:15 pm

Sometimes those whispers can be intutition. Other times, it may be the spirit guides.

Peggy Gerber
4/11/2022 07:58:06 pm

Such beautiful imagery. Sounds like Mom is giving good advice.

Jim Bartlett link
4/11/2022 11:25:48 pm

As has been said, your words here really paint the picture, set the mood. I really like the "stop practicing voodoo - let go of the anger and forgive" line. So many questions left unanswered here - (very cool) - and why Georgia asphalt? (I guess the obvious answer is that is where the story takes place.)
Love the owl - another message hidden there as well.
Nicely done, Angela
Jim

Ashley Smallwood
5/11/2022 12:42:51 am

Very nice!! You can imagine the situation unfolding as you read.

Brook
6/11/2022 09:00:03 pm

In the first paragraph you get the image of Halloween with a black hat on the witch and a glaring barn owl. Now the scene is set for the trace state of Shelly. Her mother’s voice comes to her to warn her to stop holding on to anger and forgive the past so it will not have the power over you. A very powerful story Angela!

Sue Clayton
8/11/2022 05:07:35 am

Intriguing. Who was this man? Why was he not to be cast into darkness?

Dana
10/11/2022 04:43:20 pm

Intriguing and mysterious, leaving me wanting to read more. Who is this strange man and why is she holding on to so much anger? Is he someone who has hurt her from her past? Is this why her mother spoke to her from the heavens? Very well written as always!


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