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You Can't Hurry Love, by Jim Bartlett

30/10/2020

 
Nor will you hurry this...
Ray looks up from under the Chevy’s hood wearing a streak of black grease on his cheek and a knowing smile. “Sugar Pie, Honey Bunch. The Four Tops.” He points a finger at Mac, who’s sitting at the workbench holding a beer in one hand and his iPhone in the other. ​
“Okay, Smarty, see if you get this one.” Mac again thumbs through the phone’s playlist, finally picking a song with a self-satisfying, “Ooooh, yeaaaah.” He juts his chin at Ray as he hits play, the shake of a tambourine and the deep call of a piano filling the garage
“Too easy. Build Me Up Buttercup. The Foundations.”

Mac shakes his head. “You know old music almost as well as you know old cars. Figure out what’s up with that carb?”

“Music fills the heart and soul. ’57 Chevys empty the wallet,” Ray says with a wink. “Damn choke is sticking. I think I got it.”

Mac nods and then pokes at the phone, bringing another song to life for a few short beats.
“Get Ready. Rare Earth,” says Mac’s son, Thomas, stepping through the side door. 

“Close, but no cigar. Though they did it some real justice, I must say.” Ray closes the hood and looks across at Thomas. “The Temptations. I wanna say 1965.”

But as Ray slips around the Chevy, Mac’s granddaughter, Kat, stands in his way, shaking her head. “1966, actually. Smokey Robinson wrote it. It only made it to 29 on Billboard’s charts, while Rare Earth’s shot up to number 4.”

“Ain’t you a walking, talking Wikipedia,” Ray says, chuckling.

“Actually, I came by for something else.”

“What is it Kit-Kat?” Mac waves her over and her father, Thomas, follows.

“Now that I’m eighteen, I can vote for the first time, but I’m not even sure it’s worth it. I mean, it’s like, INSANE, right? We’re soooo divided, Grandpa. I think we’ve lost our compassion. Our humanity. Maybe mostly our minds. Just look at social media...everyone’s at each other’s throat, there’s no middle ground. Was it like that when you were my age?”

“Ooooh, boy. When Ray and I turned eighteen, we were drafted and sent to ‘Nam. That was ’68, and, yeah, this country was a mess. The protests were everywhere. We couldn’t agree on the war. Civil rights. Or even women’s rights. Then, making matters worse, Bobby Kennedy and Martin Luther King were assassinated...” Mac pauses, turning his head to clear his throat and rub moist eyes. “I guess this is probably the most divided I’ve seen us since.”

Kat shakes her head. “So we’re back to where we started? Why should I even bother to vote?”

“It’s going to be your world soon, Kat,” replies Ray. “Your voice does count. And remember, hate is insidious, it spreads like a virus. Love takes time.” 

Mac nods. “That’s for sure. Take it from someone who knows...” He taps the phone again, letting Diana Ross and the Supremes sing their lesson, You Can’t Hurry Love.”
Phyllis Souza
30/10/2020 09:48:23 am

jim, this was cleverly written. love the song titles. makes you give pause... good piece phyllis

Jim link
30/10/2020 03:22:44 pm

Thanks so much, Phyllis. I hope those of us here in the states give pause to vote this Nov 3.
Thanks again
Jim

Marjan sierhuis
30/10/2020 01:32:59 pm

Nicely written story, Jim. It is wonderful to be reminded of these 'oldie goldies'.

Jim link
30/10/2020 03:24:06 pm

Most of these golden oldies I discovered when I became one ;-)
Thanks much for the read and comments, Marjan!
Take care
Jim

Gordon Lawrie
30/10/2020 04:51:51 pm

Wonderful, and I listened to every track. Sometimes the best things in life really are free.

Jim link
30/10/2020 05:05:16 pm

Thanks Gordon. Music not only fills the heart and soul, it also frees them. With all the divide and discord, I hope music and art will one day lead us to a better path.
Take care
Peace
Jim

michael McCarthy
30/10/2020 05:33:08 pm

in these troubled times, as in others, we turn to music , especially oldies which never let us down. at this time we need music more than ever and this excellent story beautifully weaves the great music with the uncertainty faced by so many.
great stuff, Jim

Jim link
30/10/2020 07:02:49 pm

You're too kind with your words, Michael. Music has always been there when we've needed it the most.
Thanks again
Jim

Candace Arthuria Williams
30/10/2020 06:13:26 pm

Oooh Baby Baby does that take me back. Only one thing. Nobody did Get Ready like The Temptations. Nobody.

Jim link
30/10/2020 07:04:56 pm

Let's hope these soulful sounds take us forward as well.
Rare Earth did it justice, but there are no others like The Temptations.

Thanks much
Jim

Mike B
31/10/2020 03:07:48 am

You had me at Chevy’s hood, and The Four Tops. Loved all the music!!! When I reminisce about the good old days, I must use a filter, because our present state of affairs seems so much worse. Your story is a stark reminder that we had our share of
problems back then too. I guess you can’t hurry Love, but I must admit I’m getting a little impatient as I wait. Until then, I’ll continue to try not to pour gasoline on the fire of hatred...
Great Story Jim!!!

Jim link
31/10/2020 03:26:33 am

Thanks much, Mike! Yeah - little hard to not get tangled up in the barbed wire of the divide. And it's so easy to slip on our rose-colored lens when we look to the past. Let's hope we don't need them as we look toward the future. Thanks again for your kind comments!
Jim

Sue Clayton
31/10/2020 06:07:42 am

Superb, Jim. I hope the youth of America don't feel it's not worth voting like your character. The whole world needs love, no country more so than the USA in these troubled times. Let the music play.

Jim link
31/10/2020 02:43:32 pm

Thanks Sue - I'm hearing that there seems to be a good percentage of "first time voters," so I hope that suggests that despite their lack of enthusiasm, the young voters have found their way to the ballot box. Thanks so much for your comments!
Take care
Jim

Mary Wallace
31/10/2020 06:49:27 am

I sang my way through this piece. Well done Jim. Someone needs to hurry that love though.

Jim link
31/10/2020 02:46:26 pm

I'm sure your voice carried it much better than mine, but I'm so glad it gave you cause to sing. Thanks much for that. As to the hurried love, we at least need to start liking one another again... ;-)
Take care
Jim

Angela Carlton link
31/10/2020 02:18:12 pm

Stellar, coming from a child who grew up in a music family, I really was in sync with this! It literally could have been my family with the music, lyrics, car references etc..fabulous, the way you wove everything together!

Jim link
31/10/2020 02:48:04 pm

Sounds like you had a wonderful family and childhood, Angela. That is just awesome. And thanks so very much for your kind comments!
Take care
Jim

Sarah Blum
31/10/2020 05:17:25 pm

Sounds like you got my playlist I have in the car. Love those tunes. Well done Jim ending with You Can't Hurry Love! It all fits for me.

Jim link
31/10/2020 05:27:49 pm

Thanks so much, Sarah! There seems to be, in some ways, a parallel between those times and now, so it seemed a fitting touch to weave in this group of songs. And, yes, You Can't Hurry Love, though as Mary Wallace suggests above, maybe it's time we did just a bit.
Thanks again
Jim

Doug
31/10/2020 06:25:51 pm

WOW. I was pleasantly surprised when I came upon your story this morning and doubly blessed with the audio that was included with it. Thank you so much and I don't think our youth will give up on us if we don't give up on them. There are more positive things going on than we may be aware of. Doug

Jim link
31/10/2020 07:46:43 pm

Thanks ever so much, Doug. Gordon suggested the audio, and, gosh, he really had to twist my arm to include it ;-)
I agree. Today's youth is probably way more involved and positive than I give credit, but with the politics and candidates we offer, I'm sure they have at least the impression we're not being as supportive as we might be.
Thanks again for the nice comments!
Take care
Jim

Susan F. Reid
1/11/2020 11:27:09 am

Love the songs in the story. I remember the Righteous Brothers' song about the assinations of Abraham, Martin, and John. I was a teenager in the sixties, and I think the situation is much worse today.

Jim link
1/11/2020 03:18:43 pm

Thanks, Susan! Yes - I remember Abraham, Martin, and John! Another telling song of the times was Marvin Gaye's "What's Going On?" Of course there's Dylan and CSN&Y and a whole host of others (Baez, etc), which I think makes for a different picture today. There just are no protest songs, the tale of discontent seemingly riding the wave of social media.
Thanks again
Jim

Carol Garrasi
2/11/2020 02:32:00 pm

Jim I think this is your best one to date. So timely so on point, I really loved it. The music tidbits were icing on the cake. Thank you

Jim link
2/11/2020 03:26:02 pm

Wow - thanks ever so much, Carol (he says, blushing). You're too kind, but it's very much appreciated. I hope all is well with you!
Take care
Jim


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