Jealousy, by Mary Wallace

16/10/2020

She was supposed to be special, but she turned out like all the rest. He had given her everything yet he wasn't enough. She wanted to be loved, admired by everyone.

He sliced her with a kitchen knife, his rage evaporating as she lay broken; beauty unmarred, perfume lingering.

The spade slipped easily into the soft warm soil of his back garden. He buried her deep. Deep enough to cover her thrice over. She would belong to no one but him.

When his Iris bloomed next year, it would be for his eyes only.

Krystyna

16/10/2020 07:43:12 pm

She was ‘special’ and continues to be so under the wise descriptive beauty of your penmanship, Mary. How fortunate to be that particular Iris!

Sandra James

16/10/2020 07:48:09 pm

Great story, Mary. You can almost smell the perfume as you read it!

Doug

16/10/2020 08:30:55 pm

Great job Mary. Thank you.

Jim link

16/10/2020 09:32:10 pm

I had to read this twice, Mary, to get the depth. Fortunately I didn't have to thrice over. ;-) Wonderful tale.
Jim

Angela Carlton link

16/10/2020 10:02:18 pm

It's like a scene from Law & Order very vivid, well done!

phyllis souza

17/10/2020 01:05:31 am

Love the Iris. Great twist.

Jennifer Lai

17/10/2020 01:36:34 am

Was her name "Iris" also? Would be a nice twist. Well done.

Sue Clayton

17/10/2020 02:29:21 am

The sense of desolation that fuelled his rage and the grief at his loss came through loud and clear. Beautifully written slice of murder, Mary.

Padmini Krishnan

17/10/2020 04:59:06 am

Very evocative. A story of a possessive man who probably has many iris plants. Powerful writing.

Swapan k Banerjee

17/10/2020 06:42:08 am

Ah, the green-eyed monster, more powerful than most, when it comes to wreaking havoc...

Mary Wallace

17/10/2020 06:54:55 am

Thanks for all your comments, they are much appreciated. I thought I'd do a 'family friendly murder.

Paritosh Chandra Dugar

17/10/2020 04:28:22 pm

I am reminded of Browning's "My Last Duchess." But the ending of your story is much better. Very well done, Mary.

Jim Woessner

19/10/2020 10:03:27 pm

Holy Moly. I read it "thrice" over. (Must be an Australian thing.) Great murder story. Loved it.

Don Tassone link

20/10/2020 02:05:17 pm

Clever -- and a perfect Halloween tale. Well done, Mary. 🎃

Mimz

24/10/2020 04:04:32 am

Delightful piece.

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