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Castles in the Sand, by Jim Bartlett

29/3/2019

 
School finally out, Roy and his brother bask in the summer sun, enjoying their first beach trip as they put the finishing touches on their sandcastles. Roy, the oldest, rounds off the last of his tall towers, then steps back to admire his work. He looks at his brother, who’s digging out an arched opening to the front of his. While the castle is much smaller, it’s grand in its style and Roy is impressed.
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“King Arthur and his Knights will be living in this magnificent castle. Who will be living in yours, fine sir?”

“Just a mouse,” replies Walt.
Michael McCarthy
29/3/2019 10:11:02 pm

for such a short story this is very thought provoking
two brothers, one has the need to impress, the other modest and happier in his skin. scope for more from these two. Great stuff, Jim

Jim link
31/3/2019 04:09:45 pm

Thanks Mike! It's fun to see how a story can be seen in so many ways by so many different eyes. My references may have been a bit too vague in this one - as the mouse Walt is talking about happens to be named Mickey.
Thanks
Jim

Mike B
31/3/2019 10:56:11 pm

Good one Jim!! Very clever, made me smile... I'm sure the Disney brothers would have enjoyed it as well.

Jim link
31/3/2019 11:42:11 pm

Thanks Mike!! So glad you enjoyed it...and more so that it made you smile!!
Jim

Cindy Patrick
4/4/2019 02:27:34 pm

This is a smile-maker. Meaningful, as well, revealing differences between brothers.

Jim link
4/4/2019 03:47:37 pm

Thanks ever so much, Cindy!! I think we always hold on to hope that the stories we write - and read - will evoke a smile, tug at the heart, or give pause to a thoughtful moment. Thanks for the read and your wonderful comment!
Take care
Jim


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