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One Last Job, by Bobby Warner

23/10/2020

 
Jeffords stepped down off the train. The ride from Tulsa had been tiring, and at 62 he was tired of tiring. All he wanted was to return to Oklahoma and his three-room cabin, and stay there forever.

But first, he had one last job.

Salter came toward him, grinning. "I see you got my telegram, old man. Thanks for coming--and making my reputation!"

The younger man made a move for his gun, but Jeffords was faster. One shot through the heart, and Jeffords holstered his gun and sat on the worn bench to await the next train back home.

Sivan Pillai
23/10/2020 02:19:50 pm

So Jeffords won't be able to fulfill his wish of going back, after all.

Bobby Warner
23/10/2020 02:43:48 pm

Thanks for reading and commenting, Sivan!

David
23/10/2020 03:24:57 pm

I like the vivid scene you've depicted. And the line 'he was tired of tiring'.

Jim link
23/10/2020 03:40:38 pm

I agree with David - and I especially thought "tired of tiring" was a great turn of phrase. I was caught off guard by the story's twist - had not expected a gunslinger - but wow - nicely done!
Jim

Bobby Warner
23/10/2020 03:52:42 pm

Many thanks for the encouraging comments!

Krystyna
23/10/2020 04:38:20 pm

Bobby, your ‘Quick Draw McDraw’ quip of a story had me saddled in the thick of Utah westerns. Well done!

Peggy Gerber
23/10/2020 06:02:06 pm

Well, glad to see experience won over age. There is something to be said about getting older.

John Cooper
23/10/2020 06:54:08 pm

Very evocative story with a great twist at the end.

Jim Woessner
23/10/2020 06:55:04 pm

What was in the telegram and how was this going to make his reputation? I want another clue. Otherwise, nice surprise.

Paritosh Chandra Dugar
23/10/2020 07:19:31 pm

Mr. Jeffords, wasn't it killing with a cool mind? How professional! Loved the twist. Well done, Bobby.

Candace Arthuria Williams
23/10/2020 07:25:03 pm

I guess he showed that young whippersnapper. Beware of the oldsters, Millennials.

Bobby Warner
24/10/2020 01:28:01 am

Many thanks for all the kind comments. I grew up on Saturday movie theater Westerns, and couldn't help trying one myself!

Sue Clayton
24/10/2020 04:56:38 am

John Wayne would have been proud of the old fella.


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