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The Intruder, by Sivan Pillai

30/10/2020

 
I waited in the shadows, my rifle ready for the wild boars.

Hundreds of plants lay uprooted before me.


A pleasant breeze, coupled with the eerie light from the full moon playing hide and seek among the slow-moving clouds, lulled me to sleep.


A loud snort startled me half-awake.


A huge boar sat before me, pointing a rifle at me. It was my rifle.


Far beyond, the electrified fence moved steadily backward, enclosing more and more forest. Several wild animals jumped over the fencing, advancing menacingly towards me.


​I saw the boar’s claws tightening over the trigger.

Sandra James
30/10/2020 07:58:00 am

Great story, Sivan, definitely gave me shivers! Reminiscent of the song 'Cows with Guns'.

Pamela Kennedy
30/10/2020 12:16:25 pm

The hunter becomes the hunted...a different type of horror story..good one, Sivan.

Bobby Warner
30/10/2020 02:20:04 pm

Another nice little "Make your own ending" story, Sivan.

Jim link
30/10/2020 02:52:52 pm

Whoa - nice one Sivan! And the ending left to the imagination!
Take care
Jim

Swapan k Banerjee
30/10/2020 02:53:44 pm

Who the barrel of the gun is pointed at, the narrator or the boar ...

Sue Clayton
31/10/2020 01:07:12 am

I shuddered with fear and cowered in terror as I looked down the barrel of the rifle with him. So descriptive, Sivan.

Mary Wallace
31/10/2020 06:13:47 am

Interesting little piece. I'm on the boars side.

Paritosh Chandra Dugar
31/10/2020 06:51:59 pm

Instinct of self preservation can teach even a quadruped how to handle a rifle. Great job, Sivan.

Susan F. Reid
1/11/2020 11:38:37 am

Wow. What an ending.


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